Friday, February 25, 2011

Jamie Reisin Task 1

English- Autobiographical Recount
I walked through the lush green rainforest on a bumpy, uneven track. The thick canopy towered over me providing me with a bit of shade from the hot Aussie sun. I proceeded down the trail until in the distance I noticed a difference in the terrain. Suddenly, the dense rainforest turned into large rocks and I could just make out clear water peacefully trickling down them. There were manmade brown objects scattered around the area. I approached the new landscape and then saw what it really was..... It was The Challenge Valley.
I embarked on a journey that I would never forget. The first obstacle was very challenging. It was a brown plank of wood on a slant angling upwards and then continuing to a ladder going down made out of tyres. It doesn’t seem that hard, but I can tell you now, when it has just been hosed, it is extremely slippery. Therefore, when I began the ascent I climbed with a lot of caution making sure I didn’t fall off. I arrived at the top and then started climbing down. My method brought back fond memories of when I was little. I used to go into the hallway of my house and start climbing up it like a spider. I made it near the bottom and then... I fell. The amount of time that I was in the air was so miniscule, however, I still remember the feeling. It was like I was just floating - a feeling of absolute nothingness. I hit the ground, surprisingly a soft landing into brown, gooey mud. Then I army crawled through the murky water onto dry land.
Sprinting on to the next obstacle, I tripped a few times but luckily didn’t fall. We arrived at the next obstacle which was quite tough. It was a ropes course shaped like a mountain. It was a race against the other team and we were ahead by a tiny margin. Third in line and I was ready for a struggle. I stretched out my leg using all my flexibility to make a great start. I found a rung with the edge of my shoe and heaved myself up. I had skipped 4 rungs on the chequered rope mountain! After a speedy start I was way in front of my opponent. I reached the peak of the rope system which was a metal cylinder. My whole body was over except my leg which was caught on one of the many ropes. I tried a number of times to free my leg but nothing was working. The other team was catching up- step by step they were getting closer. When I thought all was lost, I made one last sudden jerk. The good news was that my leg was free. However, during the struggle I had smashed my knee on the metal pole. It hurt immensely but that was not going to make me give up. When foot touched the ground, I knew that I had reached my destination.
Challenge Valley was a great memory of my time at camp in my first few weeks at Reddam House.

1 comment:

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    Very well done Jamie! This is an excellent response that vividly evokes the sights and sounds of camp. You effectively convey the drama and excitement of the obstacle course. You can improve this by including more language techniques: similes, personification, metaphors...

    Accurately written in terms of grammar and expression.

    Well structured with a clear opening, middle and concluding phase. A very strong response.

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